【原创】转学申请PS模版(一)

 

万万没想到,我最终还是上了美国名校!

点我进入厚仁教育美国转学专题页

 

 

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众所周知,美国的大学申请不同于中国,学校倾向于考量学生的综合素质而不单单是看考试成绩,这就使得 “个人陈述”(Personal Statement)成为了一个可以让学生在众多申请者中脱颖而出的亮点。每所学校设置的个人陈述题目都会不同,比如有些会问为何选择了这间学校;有些会问你具备什么样的与众不同特质;还有些教会学校喜欢问你对宗教信仰的看法等等。我们先来看看这样一个题目:

 

Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are?

 

这个题目从字面上翻译来看,是想要我们在个人陈述中告诉学校你有什么样的个人品质、天赋、成就、贡献、或者经验。这些个人特质为什么会令你搞到骄傲,这些素质或者成就与你是一个什么样的人有怎样的关系? 实际上我们只是需要突出写一个自己特有的性格特点或者很特别的经验。总之,这件事、这个经验、这种天赋、或者个人品质等等要对你有一些特殊的影响或改变,这些影响或改变成就了现在这样一个你,也就是学校想要找的那个“他”。这些才是学校想要在你的个人陈述中看到的内容。下面是一小段针对这个题目的范文:

 

In 2009, I came to the United States right after graduated from high school.  This experience was the turning point of my life as I had from a different background where classism in the form of ‘silver spoon’ table manner truly mattered. When I first arrived, I did not understand American culture and my English was not fluent. I first went to Seattle for my first year in American and it was the most challenge year. I remembered I stayed at the library for hours struggling with my own attempts at translations assignments. At one point, I was thinking whether college is the right course for me. American History was the most difficult course for me and it completely took me aback.  When I first looked at the book; I was shocked because it was as thick as a dictionary. Besides, I need to check the meaning of every word in the book.  But even when I was most unsure, I made a commitment to persevere and not only completed my year in Seattle but continued study in California. Each state has its own culture. I am proud of myself to change to a California girl. My grade during this time was not smooth as I had to deal with a number of barriers at the same time. Indeed, I am not only proud of what I achieved, I am also confident that I will do well on a consistent basis as UC.

 

 

厚仁:美国厚仁教育由匹兹堡市公立学区前总监Brian White白泊恩博士创建,专注于提供基于美国的教育服务,包括名校转学、开除应对、学术辅导、融入学术主流、青少年奖项规划、浸入式教育体验,是最了解美中教育差异的专家,指导留美学生成功的导师。

 

万万没想到,我最终还是上了美国名校!

点我进入厚仁教育美国转学专题页

 

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